H,
I really enjoyed your essay.  You did a great job using your own personal experience 
combined with your sources to create a very comprehensible essay.  

Your essay is very well written.  I hope my suggestions will prove helpful to you....

To begin, I believe that you need to have a properly formatted header for this type of 
essay. 

In the last sentence of your 1st paragraph, you state "Everyone loses when hiring is not 
handled with care and strategy".  In reading this sentence, I questioned the word 'loses'.  
I looked this word up in 2 dictionaries and neither recognize this word.  The word  is 
recognized in the present tense - lose - or the past tense - loss -.  It might be more 
correct to say "Everyone will lose out when hiring is not handled with care and strategy".

In the second sentence of your 3rd paragraph, you use two words "Bad idea" as a 
complete sentence.  Perhaps it would be better to support this idea in the context of a full 
sentence.  

In the third sentence of your 4th paragraph, you state "More and more employers are 
moving in the direction of 'Behavioral Based Interviewing' and they aren't completing the 
interview process until they find the right candidate with the right attitude".  You might 
consider defining "Behavioral Based Interviewing" for the reader at this point rather than 
waiting to define this term in the following paragraph.  

In the third sentence of your 5th paragraph, you have a quotation with no source 
given.  "It's a straightforward concept.........They know you can teach skills, but you can't 
turn a curmudgeon into a cheerleader."

As far as your citations are concerned, I am not certain if I am the right person to offer 
any suggestions or not.  I have been somewhat confused about this as well, but I will 
offer my interpretation of the correct formatting for citations.  I have tried to follow the 
examples given in the textbook on pages 595-601.
.....When citing a source from the Internet or the Web, use the author, or if there is not 
author, use the title:
Your 1st citation reads (Perry, Raw Recruits, 25)
If I interpret the textbook correctly you need only to state the author (Perry)

When you cite from Information Strategy: The Executive's Journal, you have this source 
underlined in the sentence.  I think the citation still needs to be at the end of the 
sentence in parenthesis.  There is an author for this source and I believe you would use 
his name (Sears).

I hope this is helpful to you.  

Hi John,

Following is my Peer Response to your Explanatory Essay on Wildlife
Hunting and Management.

First of all, I feel that you did a good job of using supporting
evidence in your essay.  I think the clearest passage was paragraph
three because you really focused on why Wildlife Management is
valuable.  You used good references to your sources here as well.  I
also felt that your "purpose" was best clarified in this paragraph.  In
particular I am referring to the sentence:  "Wildlife helps us to show
how healthy our own environment is.  Wildlife management is concerned
with an entire species, not a specific animal.  Little or no wildlife
usually means something is wrong".  You used the proper citations here
as well.  However, I "think" there is a different way of indicating
"paragraph" that you may want to look up before submitting your final. 
 Also, you should look at your citations and make corrections for
consistency of the format.  For example, the order in which you indicate
the page numbers and the paragraph vary.  Also, should the titles of the
magazines, books, or articles be consistently underlined?  I felt
paragraph five, where you talk about how wildlife depends on people, is
the one paragraph that you could work on being more clear.  From what
you do have there, I would guess you could add some more evidence to
make it more thorough.  I like your use of statistics  regarding the
money that is used to fund the Wildlife Management Program.  I would
like to suggest that you include a statement about how that money has
been used more specifically versus just saying "wildlife management". 
For the readers who don't know as much about the subject it might help
them to understand how what types of programs specifically are put in
place supported by the money collected from licenses, taxes and stamps.
 Lastly, you might want to consider personalizing a little more your
personal feelings about why wildlife management is important to you in
the opening and closing paragraphs to tie them together more.  For
example, have you experienced or seen the damage caused by starvation to
animals, diseases, etc.  Did this move you to be an advocate for this cause?

Overall, I thought this was a good paper with a very good amount of
evidence throughout it.  I liked the statistics and the reasons for
supporting this cause the best.  I did not know that taxes on firearms
and ammunition went to this cause.  When I hear people complain about
such taxes I now have the knowledge to let them know what it's a good
thing.  Thanks for the education!